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shhh

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January 19, 2013
shhh by ~winterkate
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we are lurking too close to jesus,
on the empty edge of a lightless stage,
curved nails digging into the skin of our pale palms.

he asks as an afterthought
do you believe in something holy? and i think yes,
i think this is what i believe in.
I don't believe in god.
But goddamn, I believe in life.
© 2012 - 2024 winterkate
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Let me say, first of all, that I think this poem is entirely underrated. Where are the statistics and raving fans? I know the DD gave you some, but I feel it just needs more!
I was captured by the first line - it was a concrete image, somehow possessing softness, that slammed into me like a freight train. My mind started to work pretty much immediately. Can one be too close to Jesus? It was a lovely thought to ponder... it was just so deliciously thought-provoking! I also have never seen a line like this used before, so it was definitely a refreshing touch of originality!

That last stanza, too. Goodness. It blew me completely away! There is something just so beautiful about it. There is a vagueness that overlays this emotion, which just seeps through you. It was a stunning thing to experience! Reading your description, too. Holy crap! It just furthered my appreciation for this poem, because I now had new perspective to apply to the whole piece. I think life is a wonderful thing to have belief and faith in. Wonderful, indeed.

This was just beautifully constructed. You should definitely be proud of yourself! Congrats on the DD, because as far as I'm concerned, you deserved it entirely. Hopefully, with time, this piece can get the full recognition that I feel it deserves :rose::heart: