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Hey, I'm the leader of #Youthful-Poets, a group that you submitted this work to. I think that there's a lot of potential here, and a lot about this work that you could really improve. I like the level of detail you bring to the table - great adjectives, and the bit about September is excellent. I just wish that the poem, as such, hadn't been about a rose. Chrysanthemum, even - violet, azalea. Roses have been plucked dry, unfortunately, and so even for all your lovely diction and syntax, I feel like there's not that much to this poem that I haven't seen before.
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