First of all, as always, love your work. Very nice, very elegant, very eloquent especially. And I love that you're delving into new realms of imagery. Autumn isn't something I've seen you explore before, and I think you do it extremely well, and in a very original manner. I think my only real criticism here would be the line breaks. For example, when you say
Autumn wanted to learn how to
fall.
you've got really gorgeous content, but the breaks add in strange pauses. I'd much more suggest something like Autumn wanted to learn how to
fall.
It just creates less of a choppy rhythm. Other than that, I really, really enjoyed this piece. It's fabulous. Great job!
I think my only real criticism here would be the line breaks. For example, when you say
Autumn
wanted to
learn how to
fall.
you've got really gorgeous content, but the breaks add in strange pauses. I'd much more suggest something like
Autumn wanted to learn
how to
fall.
It just creates less of a choppy rhythm. Other than that, I really, really enjoyed this piece. It's fabulous. Great job!