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we are lurking too close to jesus,
on the empty edge of a lightless stage,
curved nails digging into the skin of our pale palms.

he asks as an afterthought
do you believe in something holy? and i think yes,
i think this is what i believe in.
I don't believe in god.
But goddamn, I believe in life.
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shhh by ~winterkate ( Suggested by tiganusi and Featured by neurotype )
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Nullibicity Jul 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Let me say, first of all, that I think this poem is entirely underrated. Where are the statistics and raving fans? I know the DD gave you some, but I feel it just needs more!
I was captured by the first line - it was a concrete image, somehow possessing softness, that slammed into me like a freight train. My mind started to work pretty much immediately. Can one be too close to Jesus? It was a lovely thought to ponder... it was just so deliciously thought-provoking! I also have never seen a line like this used before, so it was definitely a refreshing touch of originality!

That last stanza, too. Goodness. It blew me completely away! There is something just so beautiful about it. There is a vagueness that overlays this emotion, which just seeps through you. It was a stunning thing to experience! Reading your description, too. Holy crap! It just furthered my appreciation for this poem, because I now had new perspective to apply to the whole piece. I think life is a wonderful thing to have belief and faith in. Wonderful, indeed.

This was just beautifully constructed. You should definitely be proud of yourself! Congrats on the DD, because as far as I'm concerned, you deserved it entirely. Hopefully, with time, this piece can get the full recognition that I feel it deserves :rose::heart:
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winterkate Jan 25, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you so much for this! I'm really glad that the poem affected you so much! When I have one person commenting like this, I don't need a horde of fans - though my watchers are amazing and I love them all. 
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Jen-firefly Jun 28, 2013  Student Writer
Mmmm. Delicious.
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winterkate Jan 19, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you so much!
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Jen-firefly Feb 1, 2014  Student Writer
wow. First of all, thank you for the reply. After almost a year, you have still managed to thank (almost?) everyone ever. So that's impressively devoted. Getting your reply made me come back and look over here to see what was going on. Funny how many people will make things about *their* spirituality at the oddest moments. I just wanted to tell you that it seems (to me, for what that's worth) like you have handled those situations very maturely, especially for your age (as far as the internet knows). It's not necessarily my business to say so, but it's a theme I continue to see when exploring your work, so I just wanted to mention it. Keep being awesome! w00t! 
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winterkate Feb 19, 2014  Student Writer
Ahaha thank you so much! You too! :D
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Wow that's really good
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winterkate Jan 23, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you so much :D
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SparkKnight2 Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I do love your writing, but i thought i should point out that God is life. With out God we are dead.
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winterkate Jan 21, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you for the compliment to my writing, and if you worship Life as an entity then you are indeed correct.
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