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i. I fell in love with a girl who catalogued darkness,
sat in her room with the blinds closed and wrote down
187 ways it felt
in all of the different times she couldn't see.
My name was one of them,
#143, ash velvet, and I didn't know what she meant at the time
but the only description she wrote beneath it
was good night for stuffed animals
bad night for worn pillows.

And I'm sorry I made you dream of the rivers.

ii. I fell in love with a girl who never looked in the mirror
but dressed to perfection, somehow
in her blue skirt and black socks
white tennis shoes
and a smile crooked as the bottom side of Indiana –
yeah, I fell in love with a girl
who could never quite get it straight – but hey,
that's alright,
I've never been 100% straight either,

and the one corkscrew curl you have
opens me up like fine wine
each time I see you smile in that cracked bathroom mirror.
Makes me half-drunk,
near-giddy.

iii. I fell in love with a girl who was depressed by Paris,
but loved Italy because she had no expectations,
who came into every relationship with no expectations,
so the only one she could ever be disappointed in
was herself.

And Harry Potter. That girl was
mad-crazy for Harry Potter.

iv. This girl has a name. And I'm not gonna tell it to you
cause you can read it on the chest, scrawled out here
on my tag - my chickenscratch handwriting.
My goddamn beautiful Indiana smile.
THIS IS WHO I AM.

And it's taken me way too damn long to say it.

And thank you to the person who told me that this is good :)
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tokikomosoto Featured By Owner May 11, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
this had me from line one. amazing imagery btw, though i have to google indiana's "crooked bottom" since i dunno what it looks like :)
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SycamoreSea Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I love the tone of this so much, so familiar and somehow dreamy - and the line And I'm sorry I made you dream of the rivers. - so intriguingly beautiful. The part about corkscrew curls and fine wine is also perfect. <3
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YogaTeacher Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love this more than I understand it, but I understand it enough that it makes the whole world feel different. It hurts in a very good way. Thank you.
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winterkate Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2014  Student Writer
And thank you so much as well :)
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Nullibicity Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I feel so emotional upon reading this! Just WOW. You certainly have a talent for the written word. It stuns and inspires me - leaves me speechless. This frustrates me, because I'm desperately trying to come up with words to fill this comment with! I want to express my love and adoration of this piece. I want to tell you how much I felt this because you were inside of it, and I want to tell you how much I desire to hug you and squeeze until you beat me off of you - unconscious and silly. I think any writer who can make one feel is just a miracle. When I feel words THIS strongly? Gah, I just feel like crying. Thank you for showing the written word some justice. Words are my one true passion, so please know this gratitude comes from the depths of my soul.

I think many people live most of their lives with blindfolds on to certain pieces of themselves. Damn good for you, that you can accept yourself. I am one of those people still coming along on such a journey, but I hope to get there eventually. The fact you've shared yourself so much in this - and by doing so, sharing your hope - it just means so much to be able to read these kinds of emotions. They practically leap off of the page and smack me in the forehead! Lovely, lovely job, dear. I apologize that I'm so inarticulate in expressing my emotions regarding this piece. It was just gorgeous. :rose:
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scribblesinnias Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2013
Beautiful!
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winterkate Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2014  Student Writer
Thanks!
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abominablecake1 Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Student General Artist
This is wonderful<3
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winterkate Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you!
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neonsquiggle Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is wonderful. I just love it.
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