This gives much to be considered. I almost have no words, because I'm not even sure what to feel. Please know, I thought this was brilliant - genius! The title added further to this beauty, and I could not help but to read this piece over and over again! It seems to hold so many meanings. I find myself with the urge to want to dig them up carefully and tenderly. Bravo!
Just the whole image this gives is vivid. I get the impression of diatribe attacking this 'god.' Usually man can't reach gods physically. However, I also get the feeling that this 'god' seems vague. Vast. Perhaps that's because there are so many out there - I don't know, it's just a different feeling. I don't know how to describe it. Perhaps its the word just representing something? But that could be far off. Either way, you've worded this excellently! I loved the fact you used the word "wolves" and then the fact they are finding something... much like a hunt. Wonderful image, wonderful words, and combine that into the control of a six word story? I quite admire your skill! I think short poems are hard to write, and six word stories even more so! I mean, many find them easy, but I am not speaking of the general SWS. More, I am speaking of the ones that actually mean something - the ones that say something meanwhile, or worth listening to. This one, I feel, says so much that it becomes mind boggling. Marvelous job.
First of all, I have to confess: the reason I haven't replied to you sooner is because your comments are such an ego boost I've been quietly hoarding them, reading them over and over. The fact that you wrote two full paragraphs on an SWS is beyond flattering, and I literally cannot thank you enough
i normally am not a fan of six word stories, but this one is magnificently done. i do have one critique; i feel like you should capitalize God, especially because you are putting a very important emphasis on the word, even if it might not be a traditional one.
Thank you so much! Actually, the lowercase letter is on purpose, because the 'god' can be anything you hold dear - a person, a symbol, even an object. Not necessarily God Himself or Herself. Thank you very much for the lovely critique and comment, though - I assure you, I did really think about what you said when I was writing the piece. Thank you so much again!
i can tell the difference between someone who actually put thought into a critique and logically denied it b/c it conflicted with their rhetorical exigence, and someone who is like I KNO BETTUR DEN U SHUT UP. you are most definitely the former, haha.
Thank you! I promise I always take good insights into consideration, and I'm glad that you felt that.
By the way, I'm not neglecting replying to your critique. I'm out of the country right now, and I want to wait till I get back to comment on the really long, detailed, excellent comments/critiques I've received in this time (like yours). So I will reply soon, and I do value your insights - I just want to have a good amount of time and stability to consider them first. To really go in-depth.
Thank you so much for the dedication ^_^ Utterly thrilled ^^ (Is this your first six word story..?) That's a very vivid metaphor - a biography that could apply to all of us I suppose. (But especially resonates with me at the moment ^^") I was looking at your comment further down - I had been thinking of forests, myths and legends, and Red Riding Hood. (Er, did see your story this morning but didn't have time to comment ^^") You definitely got that idea across. And it's a defiant story - a god can stand up to mere wolves. We shouldn't worry about what we hold sacred being attacked.
Yeah, it's my first. I might try more later - I kinda like the form thank you for inspiring me to try it! I'm really glad that my original sentiments translated so well in such a brief work - it's always so cool to see how people interpret my stuff . I personally thought of it as a more sad story, during creation, but I like how you've interpreted it. Defiance is good, and most gods have well-deserved reputations for holding their own.
I'm rather proud I inspired you to have a crack at SWSs ^^ (Seem to have inspired a lot of people to have a go at them recently. Feels really good ^_^) I think it's a positive thing that I've interpreted it slightly differently from you - a good story should allow for a little ambiguity; a little room for personal interpretation. Your intentions came across clearly but I found in your story what I needed to find ^^
Thank you! Yeah, actually, the first time I wrote this text (I gave it to a very good friend) it was written over a picture of a forest - hence the Little Red Riding Hood feel. My idea was that god could be anything, anything you hold sacred at all. Thanks for the compliment, and for recognizing that it was written with a forest in mind