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Sometimes the wolves find my god.
~SCFrankles, this is for you :)
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Nullibicity Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This gives much to be considered. I almost have no words, because I'm not even sure what to feel. Please know, I thought this was brilliant - genius! The title added further to this beauty, and I could not help but to read this piece over and over again! It seems to hold so many meanings. I find myself with the urge to want to dig them up carefully and tenderly. Bravo!

Just the whole image this gives is vivid. I get the impression of diatribe attacking this 'god.' Usually man can't reach gods physically. However, I also get the feeling that this 'god' seems vague. Vast. Perhaps that's because there are so many out there - I don't know, it's just a different feeling. I don't know how to describe it. Perhaps its the word just representing something? But that could be far off. Either way, you've worded this excellently! I loved the fact you used the word "wolves" and then the fact they are finding something... much like a hunt. Wonderful image, wonderful words, and combine that into the control of a six word story? I quite admire your skill! I think short poems are hard to write, and six word stories even more so! I mean, many find them easy, but I am not speaking of the general SWS. More, I am speaking of the ones that actually mean something - the ones that say something meanwhile, or worth listening to. This one, I feel, says so much that it becomes mind boggling.
Marvelous job. :rose:
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winterkate Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2014  Student Writer
First of all, I have to confess: the reason I haven't replied to you sooner is because your comments are such an ego boost I've been quietly hoarding them, reading them over and over. The fact that you wrote two full paragraphs on an SWS is beyond flattering, and I literally cannot thank you enough :heart: 
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2012
i normally am not a fan of six word stories, but this one is magnificently done. i do have one critique; i feel like you should capitalize God, especially because you are putting a very important emphasis on the word, even if it might not be a traditional one.

otherwise, this is very stylistic and gorgeous.
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winterkate Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you so much! Actually, the lowercase letter is on purpose, because the 'god' can be anything you hold dear - a person, a symbol, even an object. Not necessarily God Himself or Herself. Thank you very much for the lovely critique and comment, though - I assure you, I did really think about what you said when I was writing the piece. Thank you so much again! :D
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2012
Ah, all right! I don't think capitalizing it necessarily removes the ambiguity, but I do suppose that it is more associated with a definite figment of a greater power.

And you're welcome (:
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winterkate Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2012  Student Writer
Thanks too, for taking my decision so well. I always get kind of upset if I feel like people brush me off on here - I didn't want you to think I was just arbitrarily setting your critique aside.

:) it's always really appreciated when people take the time and effort to suggest things for my work, even if I don't necessarily follow every piece of advice.
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2012
i can tell the difference between someone who actually put thought into a critique and logically denied it b/c it conflicted with their rhetorical exigence, and someone who is like I KNO BETTUR DEN U SHUT UP. you are most definitely the former, haha.
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winterkate Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2012  Student Writer
I KNO BETER DEN U SHUT UP.... :P just kidding.

Thank you! :D I promise I always take good insights into consideration, and I'm glad that you felt that.

By the way, I'm not neglecting replying to your critique. I'm out of the country right now, and I want to wait till I get back to comment on the really long, detailed, excellent comments/critiques I've received in this time (like yours). So I will reply soon, and I do value your insights - I just want to have a good amount of time and stability to consider them first. To really go in-depth.

But thank you again!
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2012
\o/ i didn't think you were neglecting it (: i'll be glad to hear your response.
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winterkate Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2012  Student Writer
Awesome-sauce! Coming right up!
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